幫我修改一個作文用英語怎麼說

A. 幫我修改英語作文 謝謝

Dear parents, thank you for your self-giving love. (既然不是寫給你父母的信這句話就沒有必要了，或者改為I want to thank my parents for their self-giving love.) As the (the 去掉)time went,I grow（grew,過去式） up gently and leavr（left, leave的過去式） my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact with(with去掉，contact是及物動詞) both of them is less and less.But I always believe thay my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my home is expecially（你是想用especially吧，不過這個詞太中國話了，就改為very, 如果是非常的窮就用extremely） poor.So my father have(had, has的過去式) to stay on a stange（strange） land for earning bread to ours family.(此處用一個不定式短語好一些，to earn bread for our family) And my mather(mother) raise our theer brothers to maturity self(媽媽把我們三個兄弟拉扯大，可以改為 We three brothers were brought up by our poor mother).
When I was in the(the 去掉) hige school,my parents workded more hard（hard的比較級是harder, 不是more hard） and endeavor in order to get more money afford me to study..(這一句都改一下吧：When I was in high school（根據你的上下文此處應該是junior high school）, my parents worked even harder in order to get the money for my tuition and fee. ）although（Although） they usually have(had) to get up early to work and late off work, they never have(had) any complain(complaint 名詞).only hope（Their only hope is） that I can have a good achievemnt(in the future.)
Then I went to the (the 去掉)senior hige school in(去掉 in ) where I have(had) to depart from my hometwon to study,it is mean(It means或者It is meant that) my parents must to(to 去掉) pay more monney（money） for my school work.
Three years late(later),I went to the college in the city of foshan(Foshan),it is all know(known) that the tuition is so dear that a great number of people cann』t pay for it in china.(Chinese college students can't afford for it)But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition is not a problem, my parents tell me when I wound be off my family to the college.(這一句想表達什麼父母告訴我只管學習，不用考慮學費？)
At present, I have grated from the medical college,and to be a doctor.（and I am a doctor now）Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my gage(wage) is too low to send any few of (few of 去掉)money back home.Essentially（Principally）, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days(ring Spring Festival) (but) I will be on ty, (so I can't go back home this year).my dear parents I hope both of yours willl be health everyday. (I feel so sorry for my dear parents and I can only sincerely hope that they are healthy each day.)
Your son. God, 問題還不少，看在你的孝心的份上幫你修改了，看你也沒幾個財富值了，友情幫忙了，你的經歷讓我想起了我的過去 共同加油吧 未來會更好的 是吧

B. 請英語高手幫我修改一下我的作文

你好，我也是閃電狗的愛好者，但我也只是個學生，可能我還不能向老師一樣為你指出錯誤，但是我認為有些句子這樣修改可能更好，你可以參考一下。
標題：Disney』s first CG movie--Bolt
1. Bolt is an American white shepherd, who plays a heroic dog in a TV show and has some trouble in recognizing that he doesn't have superpowers.
修改為：Bolt,a white American shepherd,played a heroic dog in a TV show and had some trouble in recognizing that he didn't have superpowers.
2.he understood that he didn』t have superpower and the show is not real.
修改為:he realized that he didn』t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real.
3.Finally, Bolt, Mittens and Rhino live a happy with Bolt』s person.
修改為:Finally, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
4.I really like these three animals, because they are so lovely, clever and brave. There is a classic dialogues,
修改為:I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,cleverness,braveness
5.There is a classic dialogues,
修改為:Following are some classic dialogues:
6.He realizes he is a superdog that can always protect his person with his superpower. (這句和上文的邏輯聯系不太緊密)
修改為:He had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.

恩,有些語法錯誤,前後時態要一致,句式最好豐富些，多用用關聯詞．
我修改了一下，希望大番薯和小地瓜可以評論下，好讓我進行修改．
Disney』s first CG movie--Bolt
－－Do you know a superdog named Bolt? Bolt is the story of a Hollywood dog who is the star of the most popular show centering around his adventures saving his owner Penny from the evil Green Eyed Man.
－－unfortunately,The great hero,bolt, had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.
One day he separated from the studio by accident,Bolt thought he must find a way back to Hollywood to save Penny. On his long way home, he met a female cat named Mittens.Then,a hamster,in a plastic ball,named Rhino joined their adventure.As Bolt Graally came to the realization that he didn』t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real. Though Bolt had been in the sense of loss, with the help of the cat and hamster, Bolt went back at last.Finally,his owener,penny was surrounded by dangers, Bolt never lost his balance and saved her.At the end of the film,to our gladness, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
－－I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,clverness,braveness and loyalism.Following are some classic dialogues:Bolt：「There will be danger.」

Rhino：「I eat danger for breakfast！」

Bolt：「Are you hungry？」

Rhino：「Starving！」
That』s right. We shouldn』t be scared of danger.
花了我一個多小時．．．
最後，歡迎到閃電狗來，有問題我為您解答．

C. 請幫我修改一下英語作文

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