帮我修改一个作文用英语怎么说

A. 帮我修改英语作文 谢谢

Dear parents, thank you for your self-giving love. (既然不是写给你父母的信这句话就没有必要了，或者改为I want to thank my parents for their self-giving love.) As the (the 去掉)time went,I grow（grew,过去式） up gently and leavr（left, leave的过去式） my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact with(with去掉，contact是及物动词) both of them is less and less.But I always believe thay my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my home is expecially（你是想用especially吧，不过这个词太中国话了，就改为very, 如果是非常的穷就用extremely） poor.So my father have(had, has的过去式) to stay on a stange（strange） land for earning bread to ours family.(此处用一个不定式短语好一些，to earn bread for our family) And my mather(mother) raise our theer brothers to maturity self(妈妈把我们三个兄弟拉扯大，可以改为 We three brothers were brought up by our poor mother).
When I was in the(the 去掉) hige school,my parents workded more hard（hard的比较级是harder, 不是more hard） and endeavor in order to get more money afford me to study..(这一句都改一下吧：When I was in high school（根据你的上下文此处应该是junior high school）, my parents worked even harder in order to get the money for my tuition and fee. ）although（Although） they usually have(had) to get up early to work and late off work, they never have(had) any complain(complaint 名词).only hope（Their only hope is） that I can have a good achievemnt(in the future.)
Then I went to the (the 去掉)senior hige school in(去掉 in ) where I have(had) to depart from my hometwon to study,it is mean(It means或者It is meant that) my parents must to(to 去掉) pay more monney（money） for my school work.
Three years late(later),I went to the college in the city of foshan(Foshan),it is all know(known) that the tuition is so dear that a great number of people cann’t pay for it in china.(Chinese college students can't afford for it)But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition is not a problem, my parents tell me when I wound be off my family to the college.(这一句想表达什么父母告诉我只管学习，不用考虑学费？)
At present, I have grated from the medical college,and to be a doctor.（and I am a doctor now）Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my gage(wage) is too low to send any few of (few of 去掉)money back home.Essentially（Principally）, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days(ring Spring Festival) (but) I will be on ty, (so I can't go back home this year).my dear parents I hope both of yours willl be health everyday. (I feel so sorry for my dear parents and I can only sincerely hope that they are healthy each day.)
Your son. God, 问题还不少，看在你的孝心的份上帮你修改了，看你也没几个财富值了，友情帮忙了，你的经历让我想起了我的过去 共同加油吧 未来会更好的 是吧

B. 请英语高手帮我修改一下我的作文

你好，我也是闪电狗的爱好者，但我也只是个学生，可能我还不能向老师一样为你指出错误，但是我认为有些句子这样修改可能更好，你可以参考一下。
标题：Disney’s first CG movie--Bolt
1. Bolt is an American white shepherd, who plays a heroic dog in a TV show and has some trouble in recognizing that he doesn't have superpowers.
修改为：Bolt,a white American shepherd,played a heroic dog in a TV show and had some trouble in recognizing that he didn't have superpowers.
2.he understood that he didn’t have superpower and the show is not real.
修改为:he realized that he didn’t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real.
3.Finally, Bolt, Mittens and Rhino live a happy with Bolt’s person.
修改为:Finally, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
4.I really like these three animals, because they are so lovely, clever and brave. There is a classic dialogues,
修改为:I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,cleverness,braveness
5.There is a classic dialogues,
修改为:Following are some classic dialogues:
6.He realizes he is a superdog that can always protect his person with his superpower. (这句和上文的逻辑联系不太紧密)
修改为:He had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.

恩,有些语法错误,前后时态要一致,句式最好丰富些，多用用关联词．
我修改了一下，希望大番薯和小地瓜可以评论下，好让我进行修改．
Disney’s first CG movie--Bolt
－－Do you know a superdog named Bolt? Bolt is the story of a Hollywood dog who is the star of the most popular show centering around his adventures saving his owner Penny from the evil Green Eyed Man.
－－unfortunately,The great hero,bolt, had thought he was a superdog and naturely could protect his master with his superpower.
One day he separated from the studio by accident,Bolt thought he must find a way back to Hollywood to save Penny. On his long way home, he met a female cat named Mittens.Then,a hamster,in a plastic ball,named Rhino joined their adventure.As Bolt Graally came to the realization that he didn’t have any superpower.Furthermore,the show he has played a super dog was not real. Though Bolt had been in the sense of loss, with the help of the cat and hamster, Bolt went back at last.Finally,his owener,penny was surrounded by dangers, Bolt never lost his balance and saved her.At the end of the film,to our gladness, Bolt ,with Mittens and Rhino ,lived a happy life with penny's family.
－－I really admire these three animals with their cuteness,clverness,braveness and loyalism.Following are some classic dialogues:Bolt：“There will be danger.”

Rhino：“I eat danger for breakfast！”

Bolt：“Are you hungry？”

Rhino：“Starving！”
That’s right. We shouldn’t be scared of danger.
花了我一个多小时．．．
最后，欢迎到闪电狗来，有问题我为您解答．

C. 请帮我修改一下英语作文

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